Timata's speech

 Timata' speech

Presentation	Voice	Topic		Posture	Appeal
Was there a hook at the beginning? no Were the ideas in a clear order? yes Did the speech have a conclusion? no Were props used effectively? no Was the speaker confident and proud? yes Did the speaker believe in what they are telling you? yes	Was each word clear? yes Could you hear the speaker? Yes    Did they use expression in their voice? no Did they use their voice to hold the audience’s attention? yes Did they speak at an appropriate pace? yes	Did the speech have a logical sequence? no (Hamburger method) Did the speaker use their own words? no Did the speech include interesting ways to hold the audience’s attention -Quotes no -rhetorical questions no -stories no		Was the speaker neatly dressed? yes Did the speaker stand in a relaxed/ confident way? yes Did the speaker use eye contact? Litle bit Did the speaker show they were interested in their speech?  no Were gestures used effectively? no	Did you want to keep listening? yes Did you learn something? yes Did it motivate you? no Did it entertain you?   no Did the speaker use humour? no Was the speed interesting? no

speech

zz Criteria  We have been preparing and presenting speeches this term xiah .

This was our Success Criteria  

 

Presentation	Voice	Topic		Posture	Appeal
Was there a hook at the beginning? yes Were the ideas in a clear order? yes Did the speech have a conclusion? yes Were props used effectively? no Was the speaker confident and proud? yes Did the speaker believe in what they are telling you? yes	Was each word clear? maeby Could you hear the speaker? Yes    Did they use expression in their voice? maeby Did they use their voice to hold the audience’s attention? yes Did they speak at an appropriate pace? yes	Did the speech have a logical sequence? no (Hamburger method) Did the speaker use their own words? maeby Did the speech include interesting ways to hold the audience’s attention -Quotes no -rhetorical -questions storis maeby no		Was the speaker neatly dressed? yes Did the speaker stand in a relaxed/ confident way? yes Did the speaker use eye contact? Litle bit Did the speaker show they were interested in their speech?   yes Were gestures used effectively? yes	Did you want to keep listening? yes Did you learn something? yes Did it motivate you? no Did it entertain you?    yes Did the speaker use humour? no Was the speed interesting? no

lab in a box

I tried: not listening to sue and do something else then I got put in castle so now I know I should also listen.  

I found out: we had to pick a partner we had to use this bubblewrap stuff sue told room 5 can shape t me and Xiah made a ball we had to put into hot water we had to wait a long time when it dried up we all bounced them around.

And we squirted some kind of colour. We had blue. We had to wait a while. When we took it out, it looked like a gummy but it felt like an octopus tentacle.

Then we went inside we drew faces on two marshmallows. Then Sue put them in a science bottle. It was connected to a vacuum. We turned it on then the marshmallows started to grow because we were pushing air into it. Then we did it the other way around. We were sucking air out.

We had an empty bottle. We put in chemicals in it. Then it was slowly coming out. We did the same thing but we put something else, that one went out faster than the other one.

1. The key competencies I used that helped me were.
2. Not get distracted.
3. Stay focused.
4. Listen to Sue.

fractions learning story

Fractions Learning Story

Success Criteria

*Share your ideas about the problem

*Explain your thinking with equations

*Solve the problem

*Prove how you’ve solved it.  

(abigail really doesn’t like peas, but She has peas with her dinner. Her mum says She has eats some of her peas Or she won't get Ice cream Abigail has 36 peas And her mum says she has to eat ¾ of them. How many peas Does Abigail has to eat.)

Feedback WOW timata it was  really difficult trying to read your equation but I think i was able to read some of it. Next steps from kastro: maybe it would be better    if   you   wrote it in a more understandable

relating to others

Maths

Reading

Managing Self

Routines and Managing Self

Learning Story

Success Criteria

We are learning to manage ourselves to help maintain strong routines in Room 5.

Beginner (I need support to know what I need to learn and how to do it) -Ask for help when you’re stuck -Get on task straight away Learner (I ask a buddy or a teacher for help after I have tried to solve the problems by myself.) -Be focused -Listen -Be ready for learning Driver (I am in charge of my learning and can take responsibility for my choices.) -Show respect -Look after our class like a kaitiaki -Choose the best place for your learning Expert (I know what I need to learn and how to learn it.  I take challenges in my learning.) -Try your best -Choose to challenge yourself -Consistently help our class be ready.

Before we put our names on the wall, I thought I was a learner because I mostly listened After I chatted with my teacher, we agreed I was a beginner because i’m not focused on my work My learning goal now is focusing on my learning You will see me achieve is when I choose to  sitting on my desk and doing my work i won't be on the wrong websites and I’ll let no one distract me.

Narrative Learning Story

Writing a Narrative Learning Story

Success Criteria	We are learning to entertain an audience with a captivating narrative.
I have the key parts of a narrative. *Beginning -hook -setting -character introduction *Middle -problem arising -character development *Ending -resolution I have included -Interesting descriptive words -A variety of sentence types -Paragraphs that show how I’m organizing the narrative.	In the forest there were two identical twins called Hansel and Gretel.  They were cold and hungry.  At night they were scared “Hansel, I’m scared of being in the dark and I’m cold and hungry.” said Gretel. “Me to but it’s going to be okay gretel, I’m here” said Hansel. They were still walking until they found a pair of night vision goggles.”hansel look  night vision goggles” said gretel “good job sis now we can see through the dark” said hansel. But when they both were walking they fell into a trap it was quicksand hansel and gretel were screaming “we're going to drown please someone help us” said hansel “hansel hold me I don’t want drouin“ said gretel crying. But when they were almost drowned someone swung across and grabbed hansel and gretel they were saved by a man his name was david. He was a dad to a wife and three kids his wife her name was meryoul one of the kids names were zack the other one's name was aj and the last one's name was jackie “hello thank you for saving us” said hansel and gretel. But when gretel was playing upsy daisy with jackie. Then when they  were playing “hahahahahahahahahahaha” said gretel laughing. “Hahahahahhahaha” said jackie but then gretel toust him to high jackie hit his head on the roof real hard then jackie cried “www waaaaaaaa (sniff)(sniff)” said sad sad jackie “it was an accident” said gretel “ there’s no more sorry’s” said david ageredly.
My next steps:	Next time I’m writing a narrative, I will be thinking about:  a hook,resolution and an end

This is what someone else noticed about my learning:

That a funny story but could you please put more information about what your story is about- Ben

This is what my teacher noticed about my learning:

Wow, Timata, this is such a great start to a story.  You have introduced your characters and given a great setting.  I automatically made links to what I know about Hansel and Gretel, but it was really interesting that you gave it a different twist when they got saved by that family.  I liked that!  You have done really well at using punctuation whenever someone was speaking, and you’ve often used full stops in the right places.  You’ve got a middle where some problems arise, and some get solved.  However, I wasn’t really expecting the end there.  I thought there would be more of a resolution, because I’m really interested in finding out if Hansel and Gretel ever found a place to live happily ever after, and actually, how they got into the woods in the first place!

Rodin

We have been learning about different sculptors in Room 5.  We did some research and found a way to share our learning through a poster.

The goal was to share certain information and present it in an effective way.  

My success criteria were…

Information	Features
*Sculptor name. *Sculptor birth/death date. *Sculptors place of birth. *What materials the sculptor mainly used. *What motivated the sculptor’s message. *An image of one main sculpture of that sculptor.	*bold, readable words *The meaning of words is clear/purposeful *Images are clear and sized in a way we can see *Colours that compliment each other *Simple but eye-catching

How do you think I did?  

MY FIRST POST

My name is Timata.  I am 9 years old. I am year 5 in room 5. I play Rugby and Ki O Rahi.   I was in the carving group.   I carved a skull. Then I went to ICT beacuse I am the expert on minecraft.